Sunday, February 28, 2016

Report on my Interviews

Now that I have conducted interviews with two professionals in my field, it is time to come back and report on what I have learned!
"Mount Hood Reflection" via Wikipedia.  Public domain.

What are the most significant or interesting genres that you learned about from your interviewees? Please identify at least THREE specific genres from your discipline/field of study that your interview subjects discussed writing within. 

Three of the genres that I learned about from within my field of study are presentations (slideshows), videos, and articles/papers.

How do these genres differ from one another? Think about things like genre convention, content, purpose, audience, message, and context as you describe these differences.

The purposes of the genres are generally the same, to inform the audience.  Generally this information is about the discoveries or experiments  that the author of the work has made.  Videos and slideshows are generally intended for scenarios such as conferences or meetings so that a lot of people can acquire the information at the same time in an easy manner.  These two are similar because they heavily rely on visuals to inform their audiences, but videos have the additional aspect of audio.  Articles are the most text-based genre that are usually submitted to academic journals and databases once completed.

Based on the information you gathered in your interviews, what is challenging and/or difficult about writing within these genres (from a professional's point of view)?

One of the most difficult aspects of writing in the field is dealing with time constraints and the editing process.  It is very important to meet deadlines which can be stressful and require rigorous work.  The editing process can be difficult because an author's work is subjected to peer review, and the reviews can be extremely critical and require a lot of changes to be made, or the entire work can be completely scrapped.

Based on the information you gathered in your interviews, what is exciting and/or rewarding about writing within these genres (from a professional's point of view)?

The exciting aspect of writing in the field is that the content of the work are able to progress society in terms of technological advancement.  Published works are the result of tremendous research and discoveries, and the thought of getting these findings out into the world is rewarding.

Where in mass media - popular, academic, and/or social - can examples of this genre be found? If genre examples cannot be found within mass media easily, where can genre examples be found/located?

Genre examples of engineering work can be found on websites such as researchgate.com which assimilate the published works of people.  However, not all genres can be easily found, as the slideshow and video genres are generally intended for conferences and are sometimes not for public view if the contents of the work are for the private sector.

From Academia to Social Media

In this post, I am going to be looking up an author who was featured in the Engineering and Mining Journal (2014) on social media and report what I have learned about them from this medium.

Elaine R. Wilson.  "Mountain Bluebird" via Wikipedia.  CC SA license.

What is the name of the author (from the academic journal) that you selected and which social media networks were you able to find her/him on?

The author I selected is Steve Fiscor.  I was able to find Fiscor on Twitter, LinkedIn, and Facebook.

How would you describe the author's social media presence? What kinds of things are they talking about or sharing on social media? Write a brief description of what you learned about them through the listed social media feeds.

Fiscor's LinkedIn purely professionally and simply illustrates Fiscor's skills and previous work experience, similar to a resume.  On his Facebook, Fiscor shares photos of him and his children doing general family activities such as having dinner and playing golf.  His Twitter is professional, and he uses it to tweet about new editions of the E&MJ and general professional activity.

Now return to the piece that this author published in the academic journal (from Blog Posts 6.5 & 6.6). How does their persona on social media differ from their persona in the pages of the academic journal? Be specific and cite details from both the journal and the social media posts you discovered.

Fiscor's LinkedIn and Twitter do not differ from his published persona.  All three personas are professional.

"While one is too many, only 40 US miners died on the job in 2014. #Coal #mining deaths fell from 20 in 2013 to 16 in 2014, the lowest ever" -from Fiscor's Twitter.

Fiscor's Facebook shows a different side to his life, demonstrating what goes on in his life outside of work.  However, the overall persona doesn't really change as Fiscor still presents himself as a functioning adult.

"Lunch time at top of the Swiss Alps. Driving winds 20 mph, blinding snow, and maybe 25 F. Refreshing. That's the weather report, back to the slopes for a few more runs" - from Facebook.

Academic Discourse and Genre

In this post, I will be discussing things that I have learned after looking through the academic journal Engineering and Mining Journal.

"Academic Journal Markets" via jisc.ac.uk.  Open Access.


How many different kinds of genres seem to be published in this particular issue of the journal you selected? (Remember, genres are usually identifiable by their form, content, techniques and/or social function.)

The two discernible genres that were published in the journal are news articles, which are similar in style to quick reference guides, and advertisements.  A third genre that showed up a couple of times is a genre that describes important people.



If you don't know the 'official' names for these different genres, come up with names for the yourself. Identify at least three different genres within the journal issue and describe the significant formal differences between the three genres (that is, what are the key differences or characteristics that seem to be unique and distinguish them from other kinds of texts?). 
Now come up with your own definition for each genre (using the name you coined, if you weren't sure what the 'official' name is for the genre). Be sure to explain what you percieve to be the purpose of each genre and how each genre might meet the needs and expectations of a target audience.

The first genre that was relevant is a news article.  News articles are similar to quick reference guides in that they contain bold headings, subheadings, pictures, and figures which help split up the information and make the information easy to digest.  Then there are the advertisements which generally contained large images of the product that captures the eye.  Within the picture are big buzz words to again capture the reader's attention.  Advertisements contain contact information for people interested in the products.  A third genre is something of a people describer.  Pictures of people are shown followed by descriptions of who they are and why they are important.

 The people describer genre is almost like a really short news article in which the "story" is the person.  Advertisements are different from everything in terms of style, but they have the same purpose as the other two genres:  inform the reader.  However, ads have the additional purpose of persuading people to buy/learn more about a product.  News articles and people describers are there to inform the reader, and most likely entertain (although it depends on the author).


Rhetorical Analysis of Academic Journal

Me holding the "Engineering and Mining Journal" Jan-June 2014 edition.

Who are the authors/speakers published in this specific issue of the academic journal you've selected? How many different authors are published here? What do you know - or can you find out - about these people? How are the authors/speakers portrayed in the journal issue? Cite specific details from the journal issue in your answers. 

There are too many articles/authors to search through honestly.  However, there are a number of editors whom are credited in the beginning of the journal:  Gavin du Venage, Joseph Kirschke, and Steve Fiscor.  Steve Fiscor is the editor-in-chief of the journal, and has had this role since 2003.  Kirschke is the news editor for Mining Media International, and has been a longtime journalist.  All of the authors and editors are portrayed professionally in the journal.  The articles read like the news, just on the topic of engineering.

An example for the voice used in the articles is, "Pan American Silver is expanding its La Colorada silver mine in Zacatecas, Mexico, based on the positive results of a preliminary economic assessment." (Page 12).


Who is the intended audience for this particular journal issue? How can you tell? Are there any secondary audiences included here? Cite specific details from the journal issue in your answers

The intended audience for this journal is people interested in recent events regarding engineering and mining.  I'm pretty sure this is the case because the journal is titled Engineering and Mining Journal, and all of the articles are basically news reports and op-eds about the said topic.  I don't believe there is a secondary audience because normal people wouldn't care about the journal's contents.  For example, an example headline in the journal is, "Guyana Goldfields Commits to Developing Aurora Gold Project."  I suppose you could argue people interested in gold mining could be an intended audience, but this is just one article out of hundreds, and I doubt that just because one article is about gold, an intended audience is people interested in gold.

What is the context surrounding this particular journal issue? How does this affect the content of the journal? (See the bulleted questions on Student's Guide page 180 for specific questions about context). Cite specific details from the journal issue in your answers. 

The journal is about events that recently occurred that are related to mining and engineering.  It is written for people with such interests.  The locations of the news stories varies, with articles being about events that are around the world.  For instance, the opening address from the editors discusses Nelson Mandela's (a South African) contribution to mining, and another article is related to gold in Mexico.

What is the overall message of the journal issue? How did you decide this? Cite specific details from the journal issue in your answers. 

The overall message of the journal is to inform the reader about events in the engineering and mining fields.  I decided this because that is the title of the journal, and from looking at the articles, which are all events related to engineering and mining.  

What purpose is the journal issue trying to achieve? Cite specific details from the journal issue in your answers. 

The purpose of the journal is to inform as well as persuade.  The persuasion comes from the good number of advertisements that are present in the journal.  For example, the first page of the journal is an advertisement for Atlas Copco's newly upgraded DM30 II, and it provides details to acquire further information.

Saturday, February 27, 2016

My Profession

In this post I will be answering questions about my major and future profession.

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1.  What do students in your program or department learn how to do?

Students in my major (Computer Engineering) learn how to program and code in order to create/test computer software.


2.  What do people who get degrees in this field usually go on to do for work?

People with Computer Engineering degrees go on to work for companies in order to code for them and create software.


3.  What drew you to this field?

Both of my parents are software engineers and it makes good money, plus I am good with math/computers.

4.  Name three of the leaders/most exciting people involved in this field right now in 2016. Why are they interesting or exciting to you? These could be individual people or specific companies, organizations, businesses or non-profits. Hyperlink us to a homepage professional website for each person, if possible.

Elon Musk:  Musk is exciting because of his work with Tesla Motors, a company that is dedicated to producing affordable electric cars.  Musk does a lot of work in developing cars that are eco-friendly.

Google:  Google is an interesting company because of their constant innovations in the technology field.  Currently, Google is working on providing hyper fast internet to people (Google Fiber).

Bill Gates:  Gates is a big figure in engineering.  Not only through his company, Microsoft, but also through his philanthropic efforts.  His rise to riches is what interests me about him.

5.  What are the names of three leading academic/scholarly journals in your field? Where are they published? Give us the names and locations of at least 3.


Institute of Electrical and Electronics Engineers (IEEE).  LINK

EDN.  LINK

Electronic Design.  LINK

My Interviewees on Social Media

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Interviewee 1
Jerzy Rozenblit


Which social media networks were you able to find each of them on?

I found Dr. Rozenblit on LinkedIn and Facebook.


How would you describe each interviewee's social media presence? What kinds of things are they talking about or sharing on social media? Write a brief description of what you learned about them through the listed social media feeds.

Rozenblit does not appear to use social media often.  There isn't much information to be learned from his social media that can't be found on the UA website.  The only things posted about Rozenblit are his professional credentials and his connections.

Now return to the piece that this author published in the academic journal (from Blog Posts 6.2). How does their persona on social media differ from their persona in the pages of the academic journal? Be specific and cite details from both the journal and the social media posts you discovered.

Rozenblit's persona does not change from his social media to his published work.  In both cases he is presented as professional.  
A recommendation given by Rozenblit on LinkedIn:  "Thomas is extremely well qualified for a leadeship position in an IT related field. I am familiar with his undegraduate and post-graduate progression. He has excellent analytical skill and can easily tackle new, complex problems."

A quote from a published article:  "This paper focuses on the development and validation of an optimal motion planning method for computer-assisted surgical training."

Interviewee 2
Thu Tran


Which social media networks were you able to find each of them on?

I found Mrs. Tran on LinkedIn.


How would you describe each interviewee's social media presence? What kinds of things are they talking about or sharing on social media? Write a brief description of what you learned about them through the listed social media feeds.

Tran doesn't appear to use social media.  There is no activity.

Now return to the piece that this author published in the academic journal (from Blog Posts 6.2). How does their persona on social media differ from their persona in the pages of the academic journal? Be specific and cite details from both the journal and the social media posts you discovered.

Can't say because I was not able to find any posts on her social media.

Thursday, February 25, 2016

My Interviewees as Professional Writers

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Interviewee #1
Jerzy Rozenblit

1.  Summary of the kinds of professional publications they've authored.

Dr. Rozenblit has published over 200 papers that are generally in the form of articles, using subheadings and figures to display information.  The majority of his publications have co-authors/editors that are credited.  His work deals with software engineering and medicine.

2.  Two example publications.

Article:
https://www.researchgate.net/publication/269398578_An_Optimal_Motion_Planning_Method_for_Computer-Assisted_Surgical_Training

This article involves the presentation of  "the development and validation of an optimal motion planning method for computer-assisted surgical training."  The context is the development of systems that combine artificial intelligence and computer vision techniques in order to "adjust the learning process to specific needs of a trainee."  The article goes over the research of Dr. Rozenblit and his colleagues and presents their findings.  The purpose is to inform.

Conference Paper:
https://www.researchgate.net/publication/3828756_Automatic_test_case_generation_from_requirements_specifications_for_real-time_embedded_systems

This paper has to do with the research toward "automatic generation of test cases from requirements specifications for event-oriented, real-time embedded systems."  The paper is written for engineers in order to share the research that Dr. Rozenblit and his colleagues were able to do.  In the first section of the article, "Introduction and Motivation," the authors introduce the topic of the paper and explain why it is important.  The purpose of the paper is again, to inform people (generally engineers) about the research findings.

Almost all of Dr. Rozenblit's publications were in the form of articles and conference papers, which were similar in style.  His work is reminiscent of a textbook in that there are subheadings for different sections of the paper, and there are figures and drawings that help explain the topic.  The genre is almost a mixture of an essay with a QRG.  Although I believe this type of format is the norm for scholarly papers.

Interviewee #2
Thu Tran

1.  Summary of the kinds of professional publications they've authored.


My Interview Subjects

Subject 1

Jerzy Rozenblit














Pete Brown.  "Jerzy Rozenblit Gala" 11/14/2014 via Wikipedia.  Public Domain.



Job Title:  
Distinguished Professor of Electrical and Computer Engineering at the University of Arizona.

Years Active:
 1986 - Present

Education:

  • Ph.D.: Computer Science, Wayne State University, 1985.
  • M.S.: Computer Science, Wayne State University, 1983.
  • M.S.: Computer Science and Engineering, Wroclaw University of Technology, 1980.
Interview Date:
Wednesday, February 24th at 3:30 PM.  ECE room 506.

Interview Questions:
1.  How would you describe your job or roles here at the University of Arizona?  And have your duties changed over the years?

2.  What is your writing process like when creating a publication?  What are your planning, writing, and editing processes like?

3.  So I was able to find a good number of your publications online, and I noticed that most of them were styled like articles with headings and subheadings to break apart the information.  My question is, are there times where you work in audio/visual genres such as in something like a conference presentation?

4.  What kind of audiences do you find yourself writing to or for in your work?  

5.  When creating publications, how much consideration do you give to your audience?  Is there ever much consideration to people who are not in your professional field?

6.  Over the course of your career, how has writing in the engineering field changed or evolved, have social media and the emergence of the internet played a role?

7.  I noticed in your publications that there are generally figures and drawings and what not, and so I was wondering what tools/software do you make use of when writing?

8.  When writing, are you ever on a schedule where you have to get it done at a certain time?  Is procrastination ever a problem?

9.  How much work is put into the brainstorming and research aspects of your publications?

10.  How do you handle peer reviewing?

11.  Where do you generally publish your works?

Subject 2

Thu Tran

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Job Title:  
Software Engineering Manager at General Dynamics C4 Systems in Scottsdale, Arizona.

Years Active:
 1986 - Present

Education:
Bachelors in Software Engineering, Iowa State University, 1984.

Interview Date:
Saturday, February 27,  1:00 PM over the phone.

Interview Questions:
1.  What is your job duties at General Dynamics?  How has your duties changed over the years?

2.  What is your writing process like (planning, writing, revising, etc.)?

3.  What are the most common writing genres that you write in, or do you do more of audio/visual genres such as presentations?

4.  How big of a role does social media (Twitter, Facebook, LinkedIn, etc.) play in your job?

5.  What is your envisioned audience when you are creating work?

6.  What are some examples of audiences that were hard to write for?

7.  What tools/software do you use when working on projects?

8.  How much work is put into the planning and brainstorming of a project compared to the actual drafting and revision stages?

9.  Where do you generally publish your work?






Sunday, February 21, 2016

Brutally Honest Self-Assessment

With great relief, I finally finished and released my project.  In this post, I am going to self-assess my work.

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1. How are you feeling about the project you just submitted for assessment? Give me your raw, unvarnished opinion of your own project overall. 
I personally feel as though my QRG was an effective piece of work that was a very good response to the given prompt.  However, I am a little concerned over whether or not I effectively hit the correct points that the rubric requires.  I believe that the way I used the genre conventions and presented my information makes my QRG good.

2. What are the major weaknesses of the project you submitted? Explain carefully how and why you consider these elements to be weak or under-developed.
A major weakness of my project would probably be my voice.  I wasn't sure how to make a QRG that not only presented information professionally, but was also entertaining.  I definitely I leaned towards the professional side, and lacked humor that I would have liked to have.

3. What are the major strengths of the project you submitted? Explain carefully how and why you consider these elements to be strong or well-developed.
I believe that the way I used the QRG genre conventions to present my information was A1 steak sauce.  My QRG is easy to read and follow, and the subheadings split up the paragraphs so that the reader can easily understand what I am talking about.

4. What do you think of how you practiced time management for Project 1? Did you put enough time and effort into the project? Did you procrastinate and wait till the last minute to work on things? Share any major time management triumphs or fails.... 
I would say that I DID procrastinate, but I still put a lot of work and effort into the project.  I spent a lot of time in collecting content and assembling the project.  Let's just say that my Saturdays and Sundays lately have been dedicated to blog posts.

Local Revision: Variety

When editing a draft, it is important to check for variety in sentence structure and word choice so that the entire project does not sound the same.  In this post, I will be analyzing the variety in my QRG for project 1.

David Jakes.  "Blueberries and different kinds of cherries" 6/14/2005 via Flickr.  CC Attribution license.





1. How much variation is there in your sentence structures in the current draft? Can you spot any repetitive or redundant sentence patterns in your writing? Provide a cogent analysis of what the Rules for Writers reading tells you about your sentences.

I feel as though my sentence structure in my draft has good variety.  I did find that in my paragraphs I sentences that would start with an adverb and a comma, followed by the sentence.  I feel as though some of my sentences were a little windy and could be cut down.  I think that my writing style is good for a traditional essay, but in a QRG I believe it is more important to have simple sentences so that the information is easy to understand and access.


2. What about paragraph structures, including transitions between different paragraphs (or, for video/audio projects, different sections of the project)? 

I believe I used the QRG genre conventions to have effective transitions between paragraphs and points.  Each new idea/paragraph was separated using a subheading.  The subheadings not only made it clear what the section was about, but it also split up the QRG in an easy to read and follow way.

3. What about vocabulary? Is there variety and flavor in your use of vocabulary? What are the main strengths and weaknesses of the draft's approach to vocabulary?

I believe that my vocabulary was solid.  However, similar to what I said for question 1, it could be beneficial to have less complicated words in order to make the QRG easier to understand.  Furthermore, I think it would be good if I added words that would make my personal voice be more apparent.  As it stands right now, the QRG reads as a solely professional piece with no unique voice.

Local Revision: Pronoun Usage


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1. Based on your analysis, how effective is your pronoun usage in Project 1? What does actively examining your pronoun usage tell you about your writing style?

I found it interesting that I really did not use too many pronouns until I had to directly talk about my stakeholders.  Instead of using pronouns, I often opted to just explicitly say who I was talking about (i.e. I would reaffirm and say FDA instead of saying they).  I feel as though this shows how my writing style puts emphasis on clarity because using a lot of pronouns can get confusing.

2. Are there any instances in your project where you speak to or refer directly to the audience? If so, how effective are these moments at creating a bond or connection between audience and author? If not, why not? Explain why you're choosing to leave your audience out of your writing. There's nothing wrong with that, per se, but you should be able to give a sophisticated explanation of your choices.

I did not address the audience directly in my draft.  My reasoning for this is that my QRG is intended to provide information, and including the audience in my writing could influence the way the reader takes in the information.  In retrospect, I feel as though it could be beneficial to have instances in which I address the audience because it could help with engaging the audience and keep them interested.

My Pronouns

Now that I have analyzed the verbs from my project draft, it is time to take a look at the pronoun game.  In this post I am going to list all of the pronouns I used while stating whom the pronoun is contextually referring to.

Pslawinski.  "HeTube" 10/22/2005 via wikipedia.  CC Attribution license.


List:

them (defective mitochondria)

their (women who carry mitochondrial disease)

they (National Academies)
their

their (The Stakeholders)

they (FDA)
them
they
them
their
their

they (FDA and National Academies)

their (National Academies)
they
their

her (Marcy Darnovsky)
her
her

their (Darnovsky and religious groups)

Local Revision: Passive and Active Voice

After sorting the verbs from my draft into past, present, and future tense, it is time to categorize the verbs into active and passive voice.


ZephyrWritingTips.  "Using the Active and Passive Voice in Writing" 3/7/12 via Youtube.  CC Attribution License.


Active (specific)

reignited
conjure
assembled
dissent
opposing
alterations
cite
citing
altering
alter
are
published
argue
permit
began
permitted
remarked
response
detailing
decided
performed - 2
perform
benefit

Active (general)

want
carry
able
unable
have - 5
has - 15
produce
create
outweigh
be
been - 8
could
go
will
issue
produce
save
lead - 2
allowed
met
pass
crossing
experimentation
leads
creation
born
playing
concerned
experimentation
think
making
being
passed
received
contact


Passive

creation
become
taking
coined
replacing
have - 4
make
would
go

Reflection

1. Looking at the breakdown of your verb choices here, what do you notice about your current draft? Are the actions in your piece mostly general, vague or non-specific? Are the actions mostly vivid and specific? Are there instances of passive voice? Summarize what you learned by analyzing your verb usage in this way.

I found that I did a good job of not using too much passive voice.  I had a lot of active voice verbs, but a good amount of them were general.  Most of the actions that I use are easy to understand and are effect in my opinion.


2. Based on this analysis, how could your use of verbs be improved overall in the project? Be specific and precise in explaining this.

I could make use of better verbs that are more specific.  Because although I have a lot of active verbs, a good number of them aren't crazy specific.  However, in general, I felt as though my verb usage is balanced and not overwhelming.

Saturday, February 20, 2016

Local Revision: Tense Usage

Now that  a verb list has been made, it's time to categorize them into present tense, past tense, and future tense columns.

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Past Tense:

would - 6
could - 2
should - 3
have - 9
able - 3
unable
passed
permitted - 3
began
assembled
discussed
remarked
published
reignited
lead - 2
allowed
performed
leads
concerned
received
been - 8
decided - 2
has - 16


Present Tense:

are - 22
is - 29
being
benefit - 2
carry - 4
taking
replacing
create - 2
produce
permit
outweigh
dissent
altering
conjure
response
detailing
issue
produce
save
met - 2
pass - 2
crossing
experimentation - 2
born
playing
alterations
make
go
perform - 2
making
contact
opposing
cite
citing
be - 6




Future Tense:

will
won't
be - 6




1. Which tense is the most prevalent in your draft?

The most prevalent tense in my draft is the present tense, followed by past tense.

2. What effect or tone/quality does the current usage of tense have on the reader/viewer/listener?

The use of present tense demonstrates how the controversy hasn't been settled and is still ongoing.  It shows that the controversy is still relevant today.

3. If you're using more than one tense in the draft (which is not a bad thing at all), do the shifts between different tenses in the piece make sense? How do they flow? Are there any jarring or discordant shifts in tense?

I believe the shifts in tense make sense, because the contextual details building up to the big event should be in past tense, and then events after the big event should be present tense because the effects are still happening today.

My Verbs

In this post, I scanned my project 1 draft for all of the verbs I used and made a list of them here.

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Verb List

are
are
able to
alter
carry
have
taking
replacing
would
unable
create
coined
become
carry
produce
carry
permit
permitted
permitted
outweigh
began
would
assembled
discussed
dissent
altering
remarked
conjure
response
be
published
detailing
reignited
issue
produce
save
carry
have
lead
argue
allowed
met
performed
pass
crossing
experimentation
leads
lead
creation
born
could
be
playing
concerned
experimentation
alterations
make
performed
think
will
go
perform
making
benefit
being
passed
received
contact
decided
opposing
cite
want
been
citing
has
are

Tally

are - 22
able to - 3
carry - 4
have - 9
should - 3
permitted - 3
lead to - 3
perform - 2
has - 16
met - 2
create - 2
pass - 2
been - 8
decided - 2
would - 6
could - 2
be - 12
been - 8
is - 29



Local Revision: Wordiness

An important process when editing a project is to make sure that it isn't filled with superfluous words that make reading/watching it a marathon.  For this post, I will be analyzing the longest paragraph from my QRG for project 1 and will be editing it to make it more compact.


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Excerpt from my project:

"The FDA are a key stakeholder in the controversy because they are the ones who get to make the final decision regarding whether or not mitochondrial replacement will be allowed to be performed on humans.  The FDA is an agency whose decisions affect the lives of everyone in the United States every day.  People do not really think about it, but everything from food to drinks have to go through the FDA first.  Because of the FDA’s authoritative presence, scientists have to go through them to get the green light to perform mitochondrial replacement.  The FDA has headquarters based in White Oak, Maryland, but it is easier to access them through their website, www.fda.gov.  Since the FDA are careful with their public decisions, they have yet to come out with a 100% clear stance.  The FDA and the National Academies have a lot in common because they are both large, respected organizations that do not want to get on the public's bad side by making controversial decisions."

Edited version of the excerpt:

The FDA are a key stakeholder in the controversy because they are the ones who make the final decision regarding the legality of mitochondrial replacement on humans in the US.  The FDA affects the lives of everyone in the United States every day.  Everything from food to drinks to drugs have to go through the FDA first.  Because of the FDA’s authoritative presence, scientists have to go through them to get the green light to perform MRTs.  The FDA has headquarters based in White Oak, Maryland along with a website: www.fda.gov.  Since the FDA are careful with their public decisions, they have yet to come out with a clear stance.  The FDA relates to the National Academies because they both do not want to get on the public's bad side by making controversial decisions.

Reflection:

How is the rewritten section different from the original, from the perspective of your audience?

From an ease of access standpoint, I would say the shorter revision is better for the audience because it has simpler sentences and is less convoluted. However, with this easier access, there are little pieces of information that the reader will miss that can add more context to the subject of the paragraph. The difficulty with this revision is reconstructing the paragraphs so that they are simple to read yet still contain all of the important information.

Friday, February 12, 2016

Peer Review 2




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First Review (same genre):
Fernando Coronado
Draft

Second Review (different genre):

David Klebosky




1. What did you learn about your own project (or the project in general) by comparing drafts of the same project in different genres?
After reviewing my peers' drafts, it made me feel strongly about my own draft.  I learned that having a unique voice and style to a project makes it a lot better and more fun to read.  
2. I want you to plan on doing revision between now and our next class meeting on Tuesday. Tell me the top three issues or problems with your draft in its current form and what you plan on doing over the weekend to address those issues.
1.  Voice, I need to work on making my QRG more fun to read and reflect my personality more.
2.  I need to expound more upon what my stakeholders are saying in the public realm, providing citations.
3.  I failed to add a conclusion that would wrap up my QRG!

3. Tell me the top three strengths of your draft. How/why are these things strengths? How will you build on them to make the rest opf the draft as strong?
1.  I had a strong grasp on the genre conventions for a QRG.  My project is easy to follow and understand, presenting information clearly.  I need to combine this accessibility with a more unique voice.
2.  I felt like I did a good job presenting all of my information clearly.  I went into detail while still keeping it easy to read.  I just need to add specific citations from my stakeholders to make my project great.
3.  Another strength that I had was my description of the stakeholders.  I explicitly stated all of them and included a description of them and their stances.

Tuesday, February 9, 2016

Peer Review 1

For this peer review on GLOBAL issues, I looked at Brady Thomas' rough draft.  My rubric for this draft can be found HERE.

AJ Cann.  "Peer Review" 5/23/2008 via flickr.com.  Creative Commons Generic License.

Based on my experience peer reviewing, I will be discussing two mistakes my peer made, as well as two smart decisions that they made.

MISTAKES:

1.  One mistake that I noticed was that my peer didn't bring up why his topic was controversial until late in his quick reference guide.  He spent the first few pages talking about the historical context and buildup, without mentioning why there was a controversy in the first place.  I need to make sure that my audience knows what I am going to be talking about from the start so that I can plant a seed in their mind about my controversy.

2.  Another mistake that I noticed was that my peer didn't expand upon their stakeholder's public speech in a contextual manner, as well as giving the rhetorical situation for sources.  This is important to me because I didn't really do much of this in my own draft save for a couple times, and I need to make sure I go back and beef up my information.

THE GOOD:

1.  One smart decision that I liked from my peer's draft was that they had separate subheadings for the who, what, when, where, etc.  This makes it easier for the reader to follow the context of the controversy.

2.  Another decision that I liked was that his subheadings were questions.  I felt like this added interaction with the reader (myself), making the QRG more engaging and easier to follow.

Sunday, February 7, 2016

Draft of Project 1

After hours and hours of work.  The final draft has been completed.

My Project 1 Draft


To my peer reviewers:

My goal with this draft was to make it so that my information was provided in a clean, easy to read and understand way.  I would like to make sure that my descriptions of my controversy are understood and have meaning.  Harsh criticism is requested because I am not really sure what to think of my draft at the moment.

The Time Period


Sonja Langford.  "Clock" 1/23/13 via Pexels.  CC0 license.

Local
1.  https://www.washingtonpost.com/news/speaking-of-science/wp/2016/02/03/to-prevent-disease-ethicists-approve-creation-of-embryos-with-three-genetic-parents/
2.  http://www.wusa9.com/story/news/local/dc/2016/02/04/3-cases-zika-virus-found-dc/79833834/

National
1.  http://www.npr.org/sections/health-shots/2016/02/03/465319186/babies-with-genes-from-three-people-could-be-ethical-panel-says

2.  http://arstechnica.com/science/2016/02/us-takes-first-steps-toward-approving-babies-with-three-genetic-parents/

Global
1.  http://www.raps.org/Regulatory-Focus/News/2016/02/03/24245/Expert-Committee-FDA-Should-Allow-Mitochondrial-Replacement-Trials-Under-Certain-Conditions/
2.  http://www.expressglobalnews.com/update/1307887/new-ethics-standards-for-dna-replacement-therapies.html

While my controversy was occurring, there hasn't been too many crazy things happening.  In fact, I could argue that this controversy is the most impactful event going on in the U.S.  On the local level in Washington  D.C., I was able to find one article related to my controversy which discusses the inciting event.  Besides that, I just found an article about the zika virus which is raising concern throughout the area.  On the national level, I found numerous articles that were discussing my controversy.  And on the global level, I was able to find a couple news outlets that were discussing my controversy, but there is definitely less concern over my controversy in other countries because they have different ethical standards (the UK has already permitted mitochondrial replacement).

The Setting

Setting plays a major role in any story, and it is no different for this controversy.  In this post I will be discussing and describing the setting for the controversy.


"Keck Center of the National Academies" via Wikipedia.  Public Domain.

The setting is Washington D.C.  There are countless historic buildings and sights to see, and the smell of wet grass permeates the air.  Tourists are cruising the streets wearing parkas to combat the cold of winter.  It appears to be status-quo in D.C. However, down in the Judiciary District lies a large building which is home to the National Academy of Sciences.  The building is exquisite.  With a postmodern design and sleek architecture, the building is a sight to behold.  Viewing from the outside, numerous sharply dressed people of ages varying from 25 to 70 can be seen walking in and out the large glass front door.  Let's go inside the building to see what is stirring among a panel assembled with some of the greatest minds in the science fields.  The interior design of the building is just as enchanting as the outside.  With a modern techy base with a flare of the past, it is clear that this building contains important activities.  Going down a wide hall, there is a room in which there are scientific experts sitting around a large table in a well-lit room, the experts have nearly finished their 164 page long report about the ethics of mitochondrial replacement on human embryos.  It wasn't easy, there were numerous disagreements and heavy deliberation, but the experts wipe the sweat off their brows and give a sigh of relief.  The panel has responded to the FDA’s request, and have created a report that details their findings regarding this controversial topic.  


Stakeholder #3

1.  Description of Stakeholder

Today's stakeholder is Marcy Darnovsky, who is an American policy activist and is the current Executive Director for the Center for Genetics and Society.


Via Wikipedia.  Public Domain

The way I would describe Darnovsky's appearance is that she is very bird-like.  She also gives off crazy cat-lady vibes.  Darnovsky is up there in years, and has sunken eyes as though she is always tired or drugged out.  She probably yells at small children when they are playing outside at the park.  Just saying, I would not trust this person if all I knew about her was her appearance.  

After listening to some interviews and videos of Darnovsky, my opinion of her doesn't really get much better.  She has a very opinionated tone in her voice, holding strong and tight to her beliefs.  More on her voice, she sounds like that mean librarian that always yells at people to be quiet.  Actually, she looks the part too.  Her posture is good, although she does look stiff when she talks, with little movement.

In terms of dress, I will say that Darnovsky dresses professionally from what I have seen of her.  It is important to be seen professionally for someone in her position.

2.  Claims

"What we’re talking about is radical experimentation on future children. . . . A decision of such profound magnitude should not be made behind the mostly closed doors of this agency" (Paragraph 7).  SOURCE

"The known risks and areas of disturbing uncertainty [are] too large to permit clinical trials to begin" (Paragraph 7).  SOURCE


"The description is accurate — it would involve a woman affected by mitochondrial disease, whose egg provides a nucleus, a second woman to provide a ‘healthy’ egg and a man to provide sperm — but this simple framing overshadows profound social and ethical concerns" (Paragraph 1). SOURCE




3. Analyzing claims 

I would say that Darnovsky's claims/concerns about mitochondrial replacement are warranted and a credible viewpoint.  However, Darnovsky does evoke pathos through her descriptions of the ethical concerns that the experiments could have.  Darnovsky is one of the most prominent opponents of human genetic experimentation, and her claims definitely hold weight in the argument.

4.  Comparing the claims to the other stakeholders

Darnovsky's claims are very different from the National Academies'.  Darnovsky does not want genetic experiments to be performed at all, while the Academies concluded that human experimentation is indeed ethical.  Furthermore, Darnovsky seems to be conservative in her views, and unwilling to change.  She has a little bit in common with the FDA, who haven't permitted the human experimentation yet, and both are concerned over the ethics of the whole ordeal.

Stakeholder #2

DankMemes00.  "Another one" 1/23/16 via Wikipedia.  Public Domain


1.  Description of Stakeholder

This next stakeholder that I am going to discuss is a big federal organization, the FDA (U.S. Food and Drug Administration).  The FDA are a key stakeholder in the controversy because they are the ones who get to make the final decision regarding whether or not mitochondrial replacement will be allowed to be performed on humans.  The FDA is an agency whose decisions affect the lives of everyone in the United States every day.  People do not really think about it, but everything from food to drinks have to go through the FDA first.  Because of the FDA’s authoritative presence, scientists have to go through them to get the green light to perform mitochondrial replacement.  The FDA has headquarters based in White Oak, Maryland, but it is easier to access them through their website, www.fda.gov.  The FDA website is informative and intuitive, providing a plethora of information and resources about medicines, foods, and other drugs.  An interesting thing about the FDA in the context of this controversy is that the FDA slogan is, “protecting and promoting your health.”  The FDA are saying they are trying to help the people, but it will have to be discussed as to whether or not they are making the best decisions regarding this controversy.

2.  Claims

"There's overall great concern for the well-being of these kids" (Paragraph 13).  SOURCE

"There’s a whole other side of the argument that has little to do with safety and a lot more to do with how we think about children and whether we should be in the business of genetically modifying generations at all"  SOURCE

"I think there was a sense of the committee that at this particular point in time, there was probably not enough data either in animals or in vitro to conclusively move on to human trials . . . without answering a few additional questions"  SOURCE

3. Analyzing claims 

The main thing I noticed about many of the FDA's claims is that they are being very cautious with the way they handle this controversy.  The FDA is a branch of the government, and they have to make decisions that won't generate negative public opinion.  In short, it seems as though they are pandering to both sides of the argument.  They play to the ethics and emotions of the situation by bringing up the well-being of the kids, then go on to say how interesting the subject of mitochondria replacement is.  However, I don't think there is any doubt over the FDA's credibility, because if the FDA wasn't credible, all hell would break loose.

4.  Comparing the claims to the other stakeholders

Like I touched on in number 3, the FDA is very careful with what they say, and haven't come out with a 100% clear decision yet.  As it stands now, they appear to be leaning towards not permitting the experimentation.  I feel as though the FDA and the National Academies have a lot in common because they are both large, respected organizations that do not want to get on the public's bad side by making controversial decisions.

Stakeholder #1

Every story that involves debate contains stakeholders who are invested in the debate.  In my next three blog posts, I will be discussing three different stakeholders relating to the controversy of genetic experimentation and mitochondria replacement techniques.

Taken from Wikipedia "Stakeholder Theory."  Image is public domain.

1. Can you describe this stakeholder in 200-250 words? If they're an individual, vividly describe how they look, what they wear, how they move. Tell us how they sound, how they talk, what their mannerisms are. Conjure them in our mind's eye, by appealing to at least THREE of our FIVE senses. If the stakeholder is an institution or group, then describe the institution and how it appears in the world. How do people encounter this group or institution, digitally or physically? Describe their website or headquarters or something else that physically represents the group to the world at large.


The first stakeholder I will be describing is the institution that is attempting to get permission from the United States’ government to perform mitochondria replacement on humans, the National Academies of Science, Engineering, and Medicine.  The National Academies are a prestigious nonprofit organization that help shape social policies and advance the world in the science, engineering, and medical fields.  Ever since its creation by President Lincoln in 1864, the Academies have received high praise from legislatures, the media, and figures like President Obama.  People can encounter the work of the National Academies all over the place due to their influence in the sciences.  While there are too many accomplishments to name, the Academies are known as a source of unbiased, objective advice on the sciences.  The main way that people can contact the Academies is through their website, http://www.nationalacademies.org/.  The Academy website is clean, compact and filled with a bunch of information and resources for people who are interested in the sciences or just want to learn.  A major takeaway from the website is that the National Academies are dedicated to improving the world through science, and are clearly a premier organization.  

2. Can you identify THREE specific claims being made by this stakeholder? The claims should be public and about the specific story you're investigating. Provide direct quotes for three different claims or ideas made in public by this stakeholder. Each quote should be clearly hyperlinked to the original source.

1.  "Conducting clinical investigations of mitochondrial replacement techniques (MRT) in humans is ethically permissible as long as significant conditions and principles are met" (Line 1-2). SOURCE


2.  "Minimizing risk to future children should be of highest priority" (Paragraph 5).  SOURCE


3.  "The committee recommended that initial MRT clinical investigations should be considered by the U.S. Food and Drug Administration only if and when several conditions are met" (Paragraph 4). SOURCE



3. Can you explain how valid these claims are? Objectively, how much weight do these claims carry? How credible are they? Be specific. Think about how poorly or successfully the stakeholder cites FACTS, plays on our EMOTIONS, or presents themself as a CREDIBLE actor in the debate. 

I believe the claims of the National Academies are wholly valid.  I don't find myself disagreeing with anything they are saying.  The Academies are renown as a source of objective science based decisions, leading me to believe that their decisions are bias-free and acceptable.  The Academies do a great job with presenting facts, while also pandering a bit to emotion as seen with the second quote.
4. Can you explain how these claims are similar and/or different to the other stakeholders? Be clear and precise - does this stakeholder have anything in common with others involved in the debate? Who do they have the least in common with? Why? 

The National Academies are an interesting stakeholder because they are rather moderate and in the middle with their stance on mitochondrial replacement.  While they say that mitochondrial replacement is ethical and should be permitted, they also give numerous conditions that have to be met before the experiments can be considered okay.

Saturday, February 6, 2016

The Big Event

In a good controversy, there is always that one moment that stirred everything up to turn something into said controversy.  In this post, I am going to be discussing the catalyst for the controversy I am researching for my project.  My controversy is about genetic experimentation and DNA transplants on humans.


Jeff Turner.  "Lit Match" 9/7/08 via flickr.  Creative Commons Attribution License.

Genetic engineering as a general topic has always raised controversy over its innate premise of humans “playing god.”  This specific controversy narrows genetic engineering down to the altering of the DNA of human embryos through a process known as mitochondrial replacement.  Governments have debated over whether or not to allow their scientists to research this human DNA experimentation, and the United States’ debate has been highly relevant as of late. 

After holding a meeting in 2015 about the ethics of mitochondrial replacement, the FDA (U.S. Food and Drug Administration) requested that the National Academies of Sciences, Engineering, and Medicine assemble a team to address the question of whether or not it is ethical to perform mitochondrial replacement experiments on humans.

The specific moment that has resurged the debate of genetic experimentation was when the panel from the Nation Academies responded to the FDA’s request and published a lengthy report detailing the ethical, social, and policy issues that mitochondrial replacement raises.  This highly qualified panel concluded it is indeed ethical to allow scientists to perform such DNA transplants on humans because of the beneficial results that mitochondria replacement can have on young children whose natural genes would have given them a poor life.

The publication of this report has brought genetic engineering into the spotlight, and has put the pressure on the FDA and the United States Congress to permit the research/experiments or not.  The controversy will continue up to and after the FDA comes out with a decision regarding this genetic experimentation.

My Sources

Sources are always important in adding legitimacy to a project.  In this post I will be taking a look at and analyzing 10 of the sources that I am going to be using for my project.

OpenClipartVectors.  "NEWS" 10/19/13 via pixabay.  CC0 Public Domain.


The questions that I will be addressing for each source are the following:
  • Where does the source come from? What website or host? How does this affect the source's credibility?
  • Who is the author of the source? What can you find out about their credentials, background, and public presence online? How does this information affect the source's credibility?
  • When did the source come out? What else was going on in the world during that day, or week, or month that could have some affect or impact on this controversy? How does the specific time period play into the story?
  • What information does the source offer your project? Which stakeholders does it represent? What contextual information does it offer you? Why is it important to your project?

Where:  The source comes from npr.org which is a reputable media organization.  Being from npr gives this source credibility because npr is a nationally respected news network.

Who:  The author of this article is Rob Stein who is "an award-winning science journalist"  and is a senior editor on NPR's science desk.  Stein's credentials make the source more credible because the information is coming from a man who has a lot of experience in the medical and science fields.

When:  This source was published February 3, 2016.  The main thing that occurred during this time was that a few days earlier a panel from the National Academies of Sciences, Engineering, and Medicine released a lengthy report talking about how DNA testing is ethical.

What:  The story presents an inciting event in my controversy.  The story  is in the favor of the stakeholders who support DNA experimentation.  The article also provides a lot of good contextual information related to my controversy.


Where:  This source comes from theverge.com which is an American technology news and media network.  This provides credibility because the story is coming from an established network that is concerned with the sciences.

Who:  The author of this source is Arielle Duhaime-Ross, who is a science reporter and writer at the verge.  Ross has also written for news outlets such as Scientific American, Nature Medicine, and The Atlantic.  Ross' experience in the science field lends credibility to the source because I know it is written by someone who has interest in science and writes about it for a living.

When:  The article was published 2/3/16.  Similar to the last source, the main thing going on during this time was the report published that says that genetic engineering DNA is ethical.

What:  Although similar in topic to the previous source, this source provides useful information about the report itself because it goes over a specific aspect of the report.  This aspect is important because it puts the controversy into better perspective as to why DNA experimentation could be ethical.


Where:  This source comes from the National Academies of Sciences, Engineering, and Medicine which I would say provides a lot of credibility to the source.
 
Who:  There is not a specific author because this source is the report that was drafted by a group of people from the organization.

When:  The report was published 2/3/16.  Something going on during this time that was important was the fact the the UK permitted their scientists to perform experiments with DNA, which is what this report is trying to accomplish here in the U.S.

What:  This report is a major event in the controversy because the report is trying to get DNA experimentation permitted.  This report is what incited a large amount of discussions and debates.  Furthermore, this report is the written stance of the stakeholders in favor of  genetic experimentation.


Where:  This source again comes from the NPR, which I previously discussed.

Who:  The author of this source is the same as the first source, Rob Stein.

When:  This source was published 11/10/14.  This source is interesting because it discusses and provides context over the DNA experimentation before things were being approved.

What:  This article is important because it sets up the context and buildup before the controversy got into full swing.  It provides a point of view from the stakeholders who are concerned about the ethics of genetic engineering.  This is a good source because of its questioning over whether or not DNA experimentation is right.


Where:  NPR (previously discussed).

Who:  Rob Stein (previously discussed).

When:  2/3/15.  What occurred during this time was that British Parliament voted to allow scientists to perform DNA transplants on women's eggs.  Many of the other sources reference that the U.K. has already allowed DNA experimentation, but this source talks about the actual event that allowed the experiments.

What:  This source provides more contextual elements of the controversy that are highly relevant.  It represents the stakeholders in favor of genetic experimentation.  I really like this source because it provides an audio clip of an interview which I could use in my video essay.


Where:  This source was published on arstechnica.com which is a technology news and information website that has been around since 1998.  I believe this site is credible because of its age as well as the fact that it is owned by the same company that owns Wired.com and other tech-y sites.

Who:  The author is a woman named Annalee Newitz who is is the tech culture editor of Ars Technica.  Newitz work focuses on "the cultural impact of science and technology."  She has a Ph.D in English and American studies from UC Berkeley and received a science journalism award from MIT.  Newitz' credentials point to her being legitimate. 

When:  Similarly to many of the other sources, this one was published 2/3/16, the same time that the National Academies published their report.

What:  This article takes consideration into the actual process of mitochondrial replacement.  This is important because it provides details for the science aspects that the controversy is about.  This article caters towards those in favor of the genetic experiments.


Where:  This source comes from the Washington Post, which is a national news site.  The Washington Post is a credible source of information.

Who:  There are two authors for this source, Ariana Eunjung Cha and Sandhya Somashekhar, who both are reporters for the Washington Post.  Because of their experience and affiliation with the Washington Post, their article is most likely credible.

When:  This article was published 2/25/14, which is the same time that the FDA had a meeting/debate over genetic experimentation on humans.

What:  This source provides good information about what the FDA's stance is on genetic experimentation and what their reasoning is.  The stakeholder that this article represents is the FDA.  This source will be really useful for my project because it provides the viewpoints of a key stakeholder in the controversy.


Where:  The Washington Post (previously discussed)

Who:  Written by Joel Achenback who is a writer on the science and politics desk for the Post.  He has been a staff writer for the Post since 1990 which shows that he has experience and credibility. 

When:  2/3/16.  The time of the National Academies' report publication.

What:  This article is interesting because it has the narrative of one side versus the other (one stakeholder vs another).  This particular article is a little bit biased against the FDA/government.


Where:  This source comes The Guardian which is a national news and media website.  The Guardian is an accredited news site and there is little issue over credibility.

Who:  The author is Julian Savulescu, who is the chair of the Oxford Uehiro centre for practical ethics at the University of Oxford.  Savulescu's credentials, as well as the fact that he is writing for The Guardian show he is credible.

When:  2/2/15.  The same time that the UK permitted their scientists to perform DNA transplants on women's eggs.  

What:  This article discusses the more scientific aspects of the genetic engineering controversy.  The stakeholders represented in this article are the people who carry the mitochondrial disease trait in their genes.  This article is important for my project because it illustrates why the genetic engineering can be a major help for people.


Where:  IFLScience, which is a science/technology based news and media website.  The website is very professional, and IFLScience has a lot of followes on social media, leading me to believe that it is credible.

Who:  The author is Lisa Winter who is a writer for IFLScience.  There isn't any information about Winter, but she is a writer for a science website, meaning she probably knows what she is talking about.

When:  6/3/14.  This was a few months after the UK permitted its scientists to perform DNA transplants and experiments. 

What:  This article interested me because it talks about three parent babies being a thing in two years, and two years later, the controversial issue has reignited due to the happenings within the United States.  This source is good for the context it provides for the controversy, as well as being a good title.