Editorial Report 15A

ROUGH CUT:

I am nearing the end of my Freshman year of college, and more specifically, finishing up with my one and only college English class ENG 109H.  During my time in 109H, I have spent countless hours creating content, writing and assembling 3 distinct projects.  The purpose of this video is reflection.  Reflecting on both my evolution as a writer and as an individual throughout the school year and the class. I will be specifically explaining who I was as a writer at the beginning of the course, and then describe how I have evolved due to my experiences with each project.  The projects for this class were indeed interesting to say the least.  Before entering this class, the only genre I have had extensive experience in was a standard essay.  But I had a lot of fun in learning the ins and outs of other common genres and creating them for my own.  Admittedly, at the beginning of the semester I was a major procrastinator and honestly I don't believe that has changed.  However, I have learned the value of not procrastinating, because the few times I actually got my blog work done ahead of schedule, I felt much better and less stressed out.  Anyways, let's dive in to the mind of Ryan Wolfe the writer, January 2016.

REVISED VERSION:


I am nearing the end of my Freshman year of college at the University of Arizona, and more specifically, finishing up with my first and actually only college English class that I will need to take, ENG 109H. The purpose of this video is reflection.  Reflecting on the countless hours of creating content, writing, and assembling 3 distinct projects for ENG 109H and how I have evolved as a writer and even as a human being due to these experiences.

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While I wouldn’t necessarily describe myself as a bum, but at the beginning of the semester writing process and understandings of the different genres were certainly lacking.  Prior to this class, the last English class I was in was AP English back in High School, where I only wrote standard essays.  But due to my time in AP, I would say that my writing abilities are not bad if not good.  However, this course demanded the creation of a Podcast, a Quick- Reference Guide, and a video essay (which you are now watching).  Because I only had extensive experience with standard essays, it was somewhat of a struggle to create some of the required genres.  In terms of my writing process,  admittedly, at the beginning of the semester I was a major procrastinator and honestly I don't believe that has changed.  However, I have learned the value of not procrastinating, because the few times I actually got my blog work done ahead of schedule, I felt much better and less stressed out.

How did the content change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the content is being communicated more effectively in the re-edited version?

The changes I made broke up my introduction into 2 segments, one segment introducing my project and the other talking a bit about actual reflection.  I feel as though the newer version expresses my points in a much clearer manner and is easier to follow in terms of listening (i.e. it flows better).

How did the form change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the form is presenting the content more effectively in the re-edited version?

The new version is longer and also included a video clip. The video clip helps keep the audience engaged and interested.