Local Revision: Passive and Active Voice

After sorting the verbs from my draft into past, present, and future tense, it is time to categorize the verbs into active and passive voice.

ZephyrWritingTips.  "Using the Active and Passive Voice in Writing" 3/7/12 via Youtube.  CC Attribution License.

Active (specific)

reignited

conjure

assembled

dissent

opposing

alterations

cite

citing

altering

alter

are

published

argue

permit

began

permitted

remarked

response

detailing

decided

performed - 2

perform

benefit

Active (general)

want

carry

able

unable

have - 5

has - 15

produce

create

outweigh

be

been - 8

could

go

will

issue
produce
save
lead - 2
allowed
met
pass
crossing
experimentation
leads
creation
born
playing
concerned
experimentation
think
making
being
passed
received
contact

Passive

creation

become

taking

coined

replacing

have - 4

make

would

go

Reflection

1. Looking at the breakdown of your verb choices here, what do you notice about your current draft? Are the actions in your piece mostly general, vague or non-specific? Are the actions mostly vivid and specific? Are there instances of passive voice? Summarize what you learned by analyzing your verb usage in this way.

I found that I did a good job of not using too much passive voice.  I had a lot of active voice verbs, but a good amount of them were general.  Most of the actions that I use are easy to understand and are effect in my opinion.


2. Based on this analysis, how could your use of verbs be improved overall in the project? Be specific and precise in explaining this.

I could make use of better verbs that are more specific.  Because although I have a lot of active verbs, a good number of them aren't crazy specific.  However, in general, I felt as though my verb usage is balanced and not overwhelming.