Hello Ryan, I have conducted an outline suggestion on your content outline. Your content outline is very well done. It is elaborate and detailed, outlining the topic of each body section and providing a wealth of evidence to each topic. You also wrote a good thesis and have provided some unique ideas to grab the readers attention. All of this is outlined well and easy to read and understand. Sources are well used as there are multiple links within each body sections evidence sub-sections and make the content outline interactive and establishes credibility to your project. However, it does feel a bit lackluster in details in some sections, such as the closing and in some evidence portions. Something I feel will be expanded upon as the project goes further.
Good Evening! Your outline is pretty detailed and full of idea, which is great. You make good points that all seem to be backed up by evidence.
I think one of my concerns is with the format of the outline. Be careful not to be too redundant with the topic-conclusion format. This format also seems to sort of take away from your final conclusion and kind of takes away from the final kick of the conclusion.
Another thing about this format is that it may inhibit your transitions in the essay. I do not know if you have anything really in mind, but if you don't it might me a good idea to start thinking about transitions to make your essay flow from intro-to-conclusion.
Finally, I think that you can improve on your conclusion by prying more on the hatred of trump by some people. You have the makings of a good essay. Those transitions just are not quite there. Good Luck!
Hello Ryan, I have conducted an outline suggestion on your content outline. Your content outline is very well done. It is elaborate and detailed, outlining the topic of each body section and providing a wealth of evidence to each topic. You also wrote a good thesis and have provided some unique ideas to grab the readers attention. All of this is outlined well and easy to read and understand. Sources are well used as there are multiple links within each body sections evidence sub-sections and make the content outline interactive and establishes credibility to your project. However, it does feel a bit lackluster in details in some sections, such as the closing and in some evidence portions. Something I feel will be expanded upon as the project goes further.
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ReplyDeleteYour outline is pretty detailed and full of idea, which is great. You make good points that all seem to be backed up by evidence.
I think one of my concerns is with the format of the outline. Be careful not to be too redundant with the topic-conclusion format. This format also seems to sort of take away from your final conclusion and kind of takes away from the final kick of the conclusion.
Another thing about this format is that it may inhibit your transitions in the essay. I do not know if you have anything really in mind, but if you don't it might me a good idea to start thinking about transitions to make your essay flow from intro-to-conclusion.
Finally, I think that you can improve on your conclusion by prying more on the hatred of trump by some people. You have the makings of a good essay. Those transitions just are not quite there. Good Luck!