With this paper, I hope that people hold Trump in a better light. Trump is not the second coming
of Hitler, racist, misogynist, or a homophobe. He holds strong opinions against illegal immigration
which is important to make sure that American citizens are who come first. America shouldn’t have
to cater to illegal immigrants in which a noticeable amount are prone to committing crimes. To be a
strong nation, there must be borders. Donald Trump is the man to make America safe and prosper.
Revised:
With this paper, I hope that people hold Trump in a better light. Trump is not the second
coming of Hitler, racist, misogynist, or homophobic. He holds strong stances against illegal immigration which is important to make sure that American citizens are who come first. America shouldn’t have to cater to and care for illegal immigrants of which a noticeable amount are prone to committing crimes. This is not to say that nobody should be allowed to enter the United States. Anybody can come in as long as they come in legally. To be a strong nation, there must be borders. Donald Trump is the man who will make America safe and great again.
Questions
How did the content change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the content is being communicated more effectively in the re-edited version?
This is my conclusion, and I edited some sentences so that the grammar works better and the sentences flow more. I also added an additional couple sentences which helped summarize my paper's argument a little more.
How did the form change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the form is presenting the content more effectively in the re-edited version?
The form didn't really change much besides being slightly longer.
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