For the second peer review, I decided to review Avalon Lubera's content outline which is about drug decriminalization to help the prison population problem.
The content outline is overall good, Avalon provides evidence and analysis for each body paragraph at an adequate level and provides concise sentences that get the point across. I also liked that Avalon had a paragraph dedicated to rebutting the other side to her argument. Avalon has a clear grasp on the requirements for project 3, and has chosen a clear, specific, and controversial topic to argue about.
One of the main issues with the outline is that their are not specific sources cited. Providing the sources in the outline can help with organization and fluidity when creating the actual content of the project. Besides that, it would probably be helpful to provide more analysis of the evidence that is provided. For instance, the majority of the time there is only one small quip in response to the evidence that is given, which is not nearly enough. However, it is only an outline that is just supposed to get the basic ideas down.
Besides that, the outline is well made and would certainly be helpful for Avalon when she begins to create her project.
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