Project 3 Production Peer Review A

I reviewed Brady Thomas' production report for his first body paragraph about how America is handling the issue of cyber security.  I reviewed the introduction on its form.

The overall script for this body paragraph is very solid.  There are a lot of good ideas being thrown around and there has clearly been a good amount of research.  In terms of the form, I feel as though the paragraph is possibly a little wordy because Brady's genre is a video essay.  Based on my experiences with making a podcast, having a lengthy script can lead to rather long run times for the final project.  This may not be an issue depending on how it is edited, but if video clips are gonna be added to the video essay, having long audio clips can make the project run long.  I would recommend trimming down the script if necessary.  Like Brady said when answering the questions, he chose diction that was more colloquial which I feel is good for a video essay.  Having a more friendly tone can lead to better audience immersion and interest.

For a recommendation when making the video essay itself, I would recommend including clips of the politicians that were mentioned either as their own clips with audio or just in the background while a voice over plays.  It would keep the audience immersed and understanding what is being discussed.

The suggestions I made may not be necessary depending on how Brady assembles his video, but I feel as though it is important to consider video length when creating the project.  As is the case for any of the genres really, people have short attention spans.